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Write a letter to your landlord. In your letter - introduce yourself - explain what is wrong with the furniture - say what action you would like the landlord to take.

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Dear Mr Dolman, I am Adrian Akl. I moved to your
apartment
 56 Wilson Avenue
last
 week. I am writing
this
 letter to express my dissatisfaction with the condition of the furniture provided by you in the
apartment
. The condition of the
apartment
 is totally different from what you told me in the lease agreement. As you told me the
apartment
 is fully furnished.
However
, It was like a nightmare for me when I entered the
apartment
. The living room has just one coach and a table. There are holes and dirty stains on the sofa and the table's legs are
also
 broken. The condition of the kitchen is even worse. The oven is missing and
refrigerator
Correct article usage
the refrigerator
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 is not
worked
Wrong verb form
working
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 properly. I kindly request you to change the furniture of the
apartment
 as soon as possible.
Otherwise
, Unfortunately, I have to cancel the lease and get my deposit back. I trust that you will handle
this
 complaint as a serious matter and respond at your earliest convenience. please feel free to contact me for
further
 clarification. Warm Regards, Adrian Akl
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task achievement
To achieve a higher score, ensure to double-check minor grammatical issues such as subject-verb agreement and article usage. Consider organizing the second paragraph to clearly outline the differences between what was promised and what was delivered.
coherence cohesion
Enhance the coherence by smoothly connecting sentences within paragraphs and between them. Although generally clear, the narrative can be slightly confusing at certain points.
task achievement
The letter opens with a clear introduction of who you are and the purpose of your writing, establishing a strong foundation.
suitable writing tone
The ending statement is polite yet firm, maintaining a formal and appropriate tone for such correspondence.
complete response
The letter outlines specific details about the furniture condition, effectively supporting the complaint.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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