32.Some people say that art (e.g. painting, music, poetry) can be made by everyone whereas others believe that it can be only made by those with special ability. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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A group of humans believe that
art
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may be made by each person
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the other group supports that it can be only made by those with
talent
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.
This
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essay discusses these opinions, but in my
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opinion,
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art
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is for everyone and it does not matter any ability. First of all, when children commence their study life, schools
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them
both
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kinds of subjects; science and non-science(
art
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, cooking, poetry etc.). These pupils choose any type of them for their
talent
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or interests. Undoubtedly the majority of
tenageers
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teenagers
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priority over exciting and
colorful
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subjects
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they do not have
talent
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. It depends on their determination and
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hard work
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, because some time later they can be successful.
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, the prominent dancer of Azerbaijan Faig Agayev started his career without any dance ability, but
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he participated
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courses and learned all
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the details
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about
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the national
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dances of his country.
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, the other groups of people think that
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requires speciality which artist needs
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apply
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to create some pieces of
art
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. They confirm that if any singer does not good voice for singing songs, nobody can build it later. At the same time,
painter
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a painter
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or poet may inspire nature,
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colours
or any parts of daily life,
people
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but people
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cannot fix these abilities on their
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brains
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and soul.
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, the naturalist painter of Azerbaijan Fuad Karimov said that her brother Arif Karimov tried to draw some
portrets
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portraits
in his
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childhood
,
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however
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he could not
it
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perfectly, because it connected with
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, not generation. In conclusion,
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first
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idea supported human
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factors
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and determination, the second one stood on the ability for
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. l think that everybody can be
artist
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an artist
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, it does not depend on
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talent
, just dedication and
deep-working
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deep working
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.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Innate talent
  • Extraordinary skill
  • Inclusive
  • Therapeutic aspects
  • Democratized
  • Accessible
  • Quality and profundity
  • Inherent talent
  • Saturation of mediocre works
  • Artistic activities
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