32.Some people say that art (e.g. painting, music, poetry) can be made by everyone whereas others believe that it can be only made by those with special ability. Discuss both views and give your opinion.
A group of humans believe that
art
may be made by each person whereas
the other group supports that it can be only made by those with talent
. This
essay discusses these opinions, but in my opinion
Add a comma
opinion,
art
is for everyone and it does not matter any ability.
First of all, when children commence their study life, schools provides
them Change the verb form
provide
both
kinds of subjects; science and non-science( Add the preposition
with both
art
, cooking, poetry etc.). These pupils choose any type of them for their talent
or interests. Undoubtedly the majority of tenageers
Correct your spelling
teenagers
takes
priority over exciting and Correct subject-verb agreement
take
colorful
subjects Change the spelling
colourful
while
they do not have talent
. It depends on their determination and hard-working
, because some time later they can be successful. Correct word choice
hard work
For example
, the prominent dancer of Azerbaijan Faig Agayev started his career without any dance ability, but then
he participated specific
courses and learned all Change preposition
in specific
details
about Correct article usage
the details
national
dances of his country.
Correct article usage
the national
On the other hand
, the other groups of people think that art
requires speciality which artist needs it
to create some pieces of Correct pronoun usage
apply
art
. They confirm that if any singer does not good voice for singing songs, nobody can build it later. At the same time, painter
or poet may inspire nature, Correct article usage
a painter
colurs
or any parts of daily life, Correct your spelling
colours
people
cannot fix these abilities on their Correct word choice
but people
brain
and soul. Fix the agreement mistake
brains
For example
, the naturalist painter of Azerbaijan Fuad Karimov said that her brother Arif Karimov tried to draw some portrets
in his Correct your spelling
portraits
chilhood
, Correct your spelling
childhood
however
he could not Add the comma(s)
however,
it
perfectly, because it connected with Add a missing verb
do it
talent
, not generation.
In conclusion, while
first
idea supported human Change the article
the first
factor
and determination, the second one stood on the ability for Fix the agreement mistake
factors
art
. l think that everybody can be artist
, it does not depend on Correct article usage
an artist
talant
, just dedication and Correct your spelling
talent
deep-working
.Correct your spelling
deep working
Submitted by zehrahesenova772 on
Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.
introduction conclusion present
Ensure a clear introduction and conclusion that encapsulate the main points. The introduction briefly touches on the topic but can be improved by presenting a clearer thesis statement. The conclusion ties back to the introduction but could more specifically summarize the points discussed.
logical structure
Include logical sequencing and clear paragraphing. Your essay shows an adequate structure with organized paragraphs, yet the connection between ideas can improve for a smoother flow. Transitions between points need to be enhanced.
supported main points
Support main points with detailed and relevant examples. While some examples are provided, they should be further explained and directly related to the point being made to have a greater impact and relevance to the topic.
complete response
Ensure a full response to the task, addressing all parts of the prompt sufficiently. While the essay attempts to cover the topic, certain aspects are not fully developed. Each view should be explored in equal depth for a balanced discussion.
clear comprehensive ideas
relevant specific examples
Use specific examples that are directly relevant to the argument being made. They should be integrated seamlessly into the essay and serve to support the candidate's point of view effectively.