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All children should be given a free laptop when they starthighschool. Do you agree or disagree?

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In
this
 technical era, mobile phones , laptops and
such
 sophisticated items have become more popular among the public.There is an argument that a free
laptop
 should be given to each student who is entering higher
education
.
In
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 my perspective, I believe that owning a
laptop
 will be a great privilege in
further
education
. With the advancement of technology , the
education
 system has been changed astonishingly.
For instance
, consider the covid pandemic which turned the whole system upside down. With
this
, distance learning was introduced in order to reform the academic gap.we all know that many
students
 fail to accomplish their goals
due to
 a lack of accessibility.
Thus
, if there was any project launched to distribute technical devices vital for academic purposes freely, the result would be much better.
Moreover
, the
students
 who are attending higher studies need to do references related to their studies ,
to
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make assignments and projects and many more activities with the use of online facilities
too
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.
Therefore
 they all should have a relevant device for these purposes.
However
, adults hold the idea that youth can be misled by these technical devices. But, as
students
 of higher
education
, they should be well-experienced and well-oriented in fruitful utilization of
such
 laptops and other devices.
Therefore
, they should gain the maximum support for their
education
.
In contrast
, the
laptop
 is a crucial source in the
education
 system and youth have the knowledge and ability to use
them
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 fruitfully for their academic purposes, I strongly agree with providing their own
laptop
 for
students
 who are entering higher studies.
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