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The bar chart below shows current health expenditure totals as percentages of GDP* for various European countries for the years 2002, 2007 and 2012.

The bar chart below shows current health expenditure totals as percentages of GDP* for various European countries for the years 2002, 2007 and 2012.
The bar diagram illustrates the total health
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spendings
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 as
proportion
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a proportion
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 of GDP for 5
countries
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 (
Japan
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, Italy, France, Germany,
USA
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) for the year 2002.
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, it can be easily seen that
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the spendings
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spendings
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spending
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 of people living in the
USA
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are
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 the highest among the given
countries
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 whilst
Japan
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's is the lowest. In all
countries
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, public spending is
higher
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 rate than private spending except
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USA
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the USA
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.
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USA
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The USA
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 is on the top
as
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a
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 highest health expenditure 10
percent
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per cent
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 of public spending and 12
percent
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 of private spending, and it is
an
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 only country with a higher amount of private
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spendings
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 than public ones.
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, there
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is
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 2
countries
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 with pretty similar rates around 8
percent
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 in public and approximately 4 and 2 in Germany and France, respectively.
Japan
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 and Italy are taking
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apply
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last
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 place of the expenditure top, in public
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spendings
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spending
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 around 4 and 5 and in private ones around 2 and 3, respectively for
Japan
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 and Italy.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words spendings, countries, japan, usa with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Health expenditure
  • Percentage of GDP
  • Trend analysis
  • Economic prosperity
  • Health outcomes
  • Quality of healthcare
  • Allocation of resources
  • Healthcare services
  • Political, social, and economic factors
  • International organizations
  • Government policies
  • Predictive trends
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