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In the future, nobody will buy printed newspapers or books because they will be able to read everything they want online without paying. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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In
present
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 era,reading everything
on
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online rather than buying printed
newspapers
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 or
books
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.Because nowadays a lot of people prefer to read
books
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on
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online.It is agreed that in the future nobody will buy printed
newspapers
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 or
books
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. There are
majority
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a majority
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reasons
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of reasons
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 that there will be no
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paper based
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paper-based
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 news or
books
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in
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a few years from now.
Firstly
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,individuals have to pay money to buy
books
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 or
newspapers
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.
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,the
prices
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price
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 of a sheet of
paper
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 is growing.Lots of
pro
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 want to read the most popular
books
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,
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however
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however,
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 the prices of popular
books
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 are increasing and it is agreed that online volumes and magazines are the cheapest and fastest way for individuals who are interested in reading and become aware of the news.
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,all
of
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the hardbacks
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hardbacks
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hardback
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 printing may affect
to
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the
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nature.To explain that,when people are using
paper
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 for printing,they need to cut a lot of trees to make
paper
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 before printing hardbacks.
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:the old style of making 10 hardbacks may need to cut three trees and
this
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affect
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 forest and nature
due to
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 trees are one of the most important plants that absorb bad oxygen and release fresh oxygen.
To sum up
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,my view is that in the future there will be nobody need to buy painted
books
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 or
newspapers
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 and humans will rather access online ones for many reasons
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coherence cohesion
Ensure that your essay has a clear introduction, body, and conclusion. It is crucial to present your thesis statement clearly in the introduction and summarise your arguments in the conclusion effectively.
coherence cohesion
Develop your main points with supporting details and examples. Make sure each paragraph has a clear central idea that relates back to the overall argument of the essay.
task achievement
Address all parts of the task, ensuring your response comments on the likelihood of people not buying printed newspapers or books and reading online, and the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement.
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Clarify and expand your ideas to avoid ambiguity. Aim for more developed explanations and illustrations of your points to fully convey your position on the topic.
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Use specific examples to strengthen your arguments. These could be recent studies, historical facts, or credible predictions related to the topic at hand.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • accessibility
  • convenience
  • cost-effective
  • cultural value
  • sentimental value
  • reliability
  • distracting
  • access to
  • digital devices
  • internet
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