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Some people think that e-books will eventually replace traditional paper-based books. Others, however, believe that both versions will continue to exist side by side. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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Nowadays, it is true that many
people
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 seem to use
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electronic
books
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 more.
While
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 some individuals claim that they will be replacements
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, others argue that
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books
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 and traditional paper-based
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 will be used equally I believe that two types of reading
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 will co-exist together On the one hand,
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books
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 are very
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convenient
 in usage
due to
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 the fact that it is thinner compared to
a traditional
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traditional books
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books
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.
This
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books
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 are produced to look
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to
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tablets in order to carry
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everywhere without worrying that
people
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 will have
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 with
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their weight.
Moreover
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,
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books
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 include
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them
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different categories of
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, resulting in more options to choose
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vacation, by using
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e-books
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, a person has on opportunity to choose various kinds of
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instead
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 of taking traditional
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books
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 which
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 a lot
Consequently
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, there will be a lot of space for other items in
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's
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, leading to more satisfaction about its usage.
On the other hand
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, traditional paper-based
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 are more popular among readers
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than
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books
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 The reason for
that is
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 reading paper-based
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 can improve
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's
overall
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 feeling about
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a specific
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book
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according to
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 a study conducted by the lab Owls, 75% of readers find reading traditional
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 more engaging and enjoyable.
Furthermore
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, through the process of reading
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paper-based
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book
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books
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, individuals can take notes where they express their feelings about certain events happening , outline quotes or highlight hilarious moments. In
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 both reading with the
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help
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helP
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help
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 of
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e-books
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book
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 and traditional paper-based
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book
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books
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 has its own
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benefits
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benefits
Therefore
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, it seems to me that engaging in
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the reading
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 process can be done by these two
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options
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options
 equally

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coherence cohesion
Your essay provides a satisfactory structure but lacks clear paragraphing and varied connector usage. Improve coherence by organizing your ideas into clearly distinct paragraphs, using a range of linking words. Employ devices such as topic sentences to introduce paragraphs and concluding sentences to wrap them up, which adds to the logical flow of ideas.
task achievement
Make sure you address the task fully, including discussing both views and offering your own opinion. Develop your ideas comprehensively with clear arguments and pertinent examples. Your response should reflect a deep understanding of the topic and present arguments that are expanded and supported by specific examples or evidence to strengthen your position.

Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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