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The table below gives information on consumer spending on different items in five different countries in 2002. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the mainfeatures, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table below gives information on consumer spending on different items in five different countries in 2002. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the mainfeatures, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The table displays
the
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information about how people
spend
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spent
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 their money on different objects in five different countries in 2002.
Overall
, the most money was spent on
nutritions
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nutrition
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 and the less - on leisure/education in all countries. Starting with food/
drins
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drinks
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/tobacco, the leader in
this
 category was Turkey with the index, showing 32,14%.
Next,
comes Ireland with 28,91%, Spain with 18,80%, Italy with 16,36% and the
last
 one is Sweden with 15,77% of all consumer expenditure. To continue with clothing/footwear, Italians spent 9% of their spending
to
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 clothing, which was the highest rank. In Turkey, Spain and Ireland the indicators are close to each other showing 6,63%, 6,51% and 6,43% respectively. Again Sweden had the
least
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lowest
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 spending with 5,40%.
On leisure
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Leisure
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 and education were focused
Turkish
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on Turkish
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 people, whose expenses amounted to 4.35%. The Swedish and Italian indices differ by only 0.02%, amounting to 3.20% and 3.22%. In Ireland and Spain, people spent only 2,21% and 1,98% of their money on leisure/education respectively.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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