Some people say that the experiences a child has before starting school have the most influence on their future life. Others say that experiences as a teenager, especially at school, are more influential. Discuss both views and give your own opinion?
It is been debatable that
childhood
memories before Use synonyms
children
start elementary school have the most crucial on the future, Use synonyms
while
others say that the teenage era is more essential. Linking Words
However
, in Linking Words
this
essay, I tend to agree that both of them are important and I will elaborate it both views.
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To begin
with, there are several reasons why the Linking Words
childhood
era can make the biggest impact towards Use synonyms
children
. Use synonyms
Firstly
, they start to figure out how to be a human, Linking Words
this
is the phase where they learn how to think, talk, act and write. Linking Words
For instance
, the survey conducted by the Linking Words
Children
Institution of Indonesia in 2022, said that 60% of kids taught how to talk at age 3 have a better way of communicating than Use synonyms
children
who get the lesson talk at age 6. Use synonyms
Secondly
, Linking Words
childhood
experience is the moment when Use synonyms
children
can express their emotions freely. Use synonyms
This
is a good movement because they can laugh, cry, and shout without any concern. Linking Words
Thus
, they will realize that emotions are important and how to respect other Linking Words
people
's feelings.
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On the other hand
, teenage time Linking Words
also
plays an important role in Linking Words
people
's lives. First of all, most Use synonyms
people
during their teenage life encounter the next journey of feelings, which is love. It is complicated yet so beautiful, that they not only care about themselves but with others. Use synonyms
Besides
, numerous Linking Words
people
face hard situations during their teenage, or even failure, Use synonyms
this
can direct them to access problem-solving skills and analytical thinking, figuring out that the world is not as stunning as it was, sometimes things we can do are just accept and forgive. Linking Words
Furthermore
, youth conditions can affect adulting in the future.
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To sum up
, both Linking Words
childhood
and youth eras are precious for the development of human beings. Use synonyms
Childhood
affects teenage time, Use synonyms
while
the teenage era affects maturity time as well.Linking Words
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