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73.The map below shows a park and its surroundings in 2000. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

73.The map below shows a park and its surroundings in 2000. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
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The diagram
illustrate
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illustrates
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 the changes made in a public
park
 in 1980 and now
at
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in
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 the present year 2000.
Overall
, there
seems
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seem
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 to be a couple of changes in the current
park
 from the previous one. Looking at the
park
 constructed in 1980 , flowers
are occupying
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occupy
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 the ground majorly across the
park
. Next
nearby
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near
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 the flowers down the
south-west
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southwest
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 corner a little above, the benches and ponds are
in
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on
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 display.
However
, in the present
years
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years,
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 map flowers are replaced by bushes in the same location.
Aditionally
Correct your spelling
Additionally
, the gates are absent in today's garden.
Furthermore
, observing the maps the whole of
east
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the east
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 side has been drastically changed. In the year 2000, half of the
park
 is having
serveral
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several
 new variations
such
 as barbecue, chairs, desks , and trees.
Although
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, trees continue to appear in
the
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apply
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last
years
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year's
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 picture.
At
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In
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 the end, the
south - east
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south-east
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 part has a playground when compared
1980
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to 1980
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 which has a flower pit.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words park with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "map" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "present" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • pond
  • northwest corner
  • large central open area
  • residential areas
  • community-oriented space
  • playground
  • eastern border
  • parking lot
  • convenience
  • commercial zone
  • amenities
  • walking path
  • encircles
  • joggers
  • accessible
  • entrances
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