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The most important aim of science should be to improve people's lives. To what extent do you agree or disgree with this statement?

#aim #science #people #lives #disgree
It is believed that people's lives never be better without
science
 and the statement "no
science
 no future" is fully been proven through
centures
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centuries
. Being completely agree with the main and only aim of
science
 I strongly believe that all technologies in each and every
fields
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 of human life are the result of
routine
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 work of scientists. If we say about reasons it's all about digging
the
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into the
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 essence and around "whys", so
science
 or research study can give us answers, solutions and incredible ideas for discovery.
For instance
, health issues are one of the most crucial parts of human life. Today, people before going to
sport
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sports
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 may check up
themselves
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on themselves
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 in order to know the risks and chances for relevance and that's exactly thanks to
science
. It's known that some people have "silenced" genes for sport
whereas
 others can achieve significant results
due to
 their "active" genes which are responsible for
sport
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 facilities. Nowadays, we have a lot of
test-stripes
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 or kites which allow us
checking
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to check
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 up
our
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on our
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 body capacities.
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coherence cohesion
A clear introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion are necessary for a cohesive essay. The response lacks a dedicated conclusion, which affects the overall coherence.
coherence cohesion
Main points need to be developed into full paragraphs with explanations and supporting details. Expansion of ideas and connective words to link them are required for better clarity.
task achievement
Responses must fully address the prompt with a clear position throughout the essay. A more thorough exploration of how science can improve lives and relevant examples to support all points would strengthen the task response.
task achievement
Concrete and varied reasons, as well as specific examples, are crucial for strong task achievement. These should be expanded upon to better meet the task's requirements.

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • solutions
  • medical advancements
  • technological innovations
  • sustainable energy
  • carbon footprint
  • ethical considerations
  • moral responsibility
  • economic growth
  • innovation
  • pure research
  • significant discoveries
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