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It has been suggested that cars and public transport should be banned from city centers and only bicycles be allowed insted. to what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Undoubtedly, in
this
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 modern era, a number of
modification
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has been
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 taken place in
this
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 nation.
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, some
people
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 believe that
cars
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 and public
transport
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 vehicles
such
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 as
bus
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, trains and
other
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others
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 should be banned from cities and
people
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 should use only bicycles. I partially agree with
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 statement owing to some crucial reasons which I will
hashout
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 in my
further
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 paragraphs. For a start, several factors are associated with it, but the main
is
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 that with
the
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higher
pollution
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. To explain, with the advanced transportation system 90
percent
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 of
people
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 have their own
cars
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 and they
traveled
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to
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 one place to another with the help of
cars
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 which is
time saving
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 and
fastest
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 means of transportation.
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this
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,
majority
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the majority
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 of
people
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 prefer to
travel
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 through public
transport
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for
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 balance their budget. To illustrate it more,
middle class
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people
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do not
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cannot
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 afford
cars
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 because of the high amount so,
they
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 prefer to
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in
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 public
transport
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. Moving
further
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, there are some reasons why
cars
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 and public
transport
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 should be banned and
people
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 should use bicycles. First and foremost, nowadays
every one
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 is suffering from breathing problems
due to
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high
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a high
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 amount of
pollution
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 as well noise
pollution
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 is
also
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 at
alarming
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 rate
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 traffic jams,
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 and other.
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, if
vehicle's
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vehicles
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should be
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 banned from
city
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the city
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, more
people
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 use bicycles to
travel
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 and they
also
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 stay fit
while
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 riding it because scientists believe that cycling is
best
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 exercise to reduce weight and maintain
the
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health. In conclusion,
although
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bycycle
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bicycle
reduce
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pollution
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 and good exercise to maintain weight,
but
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cars
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 and public transports are more beneficial in
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 busy life because
number
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 of
people
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travel
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 to their
work place
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workplace
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 in a hurry.

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coherence cohesion
For a higher IELTS score, it is crucial to organize your essay in a clear and logical manner. Your essay does contain an introduction and conclusion, which is positive. However, the body paragraphs need better organization to enhance the clarity of the argument. Make sure each paragraph deals with a single idea, and use linking words effectively to show the relationships between ideas.
task achievement
Your essay partially addresses the prompt, but the extent of your agreement or disagreement is not consistently clear. You must directly address the question throughout the essay. Include a clear thesis statement in your introduction that reflects your stance, and ensure that each paragraph supports this position. Provide more specific examples to better illustrate your points. It is also important to discuss both sides of the argument if you are taking a partial stance.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • banning
  • city centers
  • bicycles
  • public transport
  • positive impacts
  • healthier lifestyle
  • reduction of pollution
  • traffic congestion
  • accidents
  • efficient use of space
  • urban aesthetics
  • challenges
  • implementing
  • bicycle-only policy
  • limited accessibility
  • older people
  • individuals with disabilities
  • infrastructure investment
  • planning
  • alternative transportation options
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