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The map below shows the changes that have taken palce at the waterfront area of a town calles Darwin between 2009 and 2014.

The map below shows the changes that have taken palce at the waterfront area of a town calles Darwin between 2009 and 2014.
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Two diagram illustrates how the seaside area of Darwin transformed. In the 5 year period from 2009 to 2014.
Overall
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, the waterfront zone of
this
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 town underwent various drastic changes. The most features are the construction of the new harbour,the removal of industrial space and the expansion of the housing space.
Firstly
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, to the north, the school, convention centre, lake and fishing area still remained intact
while
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 the industrial zone was replaced by an oval swimming pool. In the middle, the residential housing expanded and a new university building was constructed next to the living space making the quality of life of the people there better. In the south, the big factory zone was transformed into a huge forest. On the right side, a new harbour was built.
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, there is a new path connecting the seaside to the west. Throughout various developments, Darwin became modern and convenient for inhabitants' life

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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "changes" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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