The graph below shows the number of books read by men and women at Burnaby Public Library from 2011 to 2014.

The graph below shows the number of books read by men and women at Burnaby Public Library from 2011 to 2014.
✨ Do you want to improve your IELTS writing?
The line graph portrays how many
books
Use synonyms
were read segregated by gender, males and
females
Use synonyms
, at Burnaby Public Library over four years (2011-2014).
Overall
Linking Words
,
it is clear that
Linking Words
females
Use synonyms
had read more numerous
books
Use synonyms
in the first year and remained grew but the trend ended up as lower than men. Meanwhile, males read a few
books
Use synonyms
in the beginning and the reading habit keeps rising until the
last
Linking Words
given period .
According to
Linking Words
the graphs, the majority of
books
Use synonyms
were read by
females
Use synonyms
in 2011, up to 4,000. The trends had incline in the following years and reached a peak in 2013 with 10,000.
However
Linking Words
, the figure experienced to decrease of under 8000 in 2014. It is worth noticing that the number of
books
Use synonyms
read by males was no more than 4000 in 2011. The figure witnessed promote a slightly small number in 2012. In the next years, there was a dramatic increase and a similar number of
females
Use synonyms
in 2013. The trends remained went up until 2014 with 14,000.
Submitted by musa.nuwa on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Introduction: The introduction is missing.
Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Vocabulary: Replace the words books, females with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • library
  • gender
  • reading habits
  • compare
  • significantly
  • trends
  • increase/decrease
  • consistent
  • fluctuate
  • period
  • summarise
  • graph
  • public library
  • books read
  • Burnaby Public Library
  • 2011 to 2014
  • male
  • female
What to do next:
Look at other essays: