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The graph below shows the number of books read by men and women at Burnaby Public Library from 2011 to 2014.

The graph below shows the number of books read by men and women at Burnaby Public Library from 2011 to 2014.
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The line graph portrays how many
books
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 were read segregated by gender, males and
females
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, at Burnaby Public Library over four years (2011-2014).
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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females
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 had read more numerous
books
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 in the first year and remained grew but the trend ended up as lower than men. Meanwhile, males read a few
books
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 in the beginning and the reading habit keeps rising until the
last
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 given period .
According to
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 the graphs, the majority of
books
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 were read by
females
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 in 2011, up to 4,000. The trends had incline in the following years and reached a peak in 2013 with 10,000.
However
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, the figure experienced to decrease of under 8000 in 2014. It is worth noticing that the number of
books
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 read by males was no more than 4000 in 2011. The figure witnessed promote a slightly small number in 2012. In the next years, there was a dramatic increase and a similar number of
females
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 in 2013. The trends remained went up until 2014 with 14,000.

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Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words books, females with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • library
  • gender
  • reading habits
  • compare
  • significantly
  • trends
  • increase/decrease
  • consistent
  • fluctuate
  • period
  • summarise
  • graph
  • public library
  • books read
  • Burnaby Public Library
  • 2011 to 2014
  • male
  • female
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