Increasingly, many governments around the world are choosing to provide greater funding for scientific and technological development rather than investing in arts and culture. Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

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governments prefer to invest in the fields of science and technology and ignore the importance of the

arts

and

culture

. Personally, I think

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choice could have a negative influence on

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society, and the following content will list the reasons.

Arts

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culture

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feeling

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and release

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pressure.

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the community only focus on the practical and efficient usage of the profession, most of them will neglect the mental aspect,

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them accumulate the pressure and

finally

cause psychological diseases.

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, plenty of workers suffered from mental illness because they couldn’t find a way to relax, so several psychologists suggested

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learn about

arts

which can assist

people

to release their accumulated stress. The various kinds of

arts

and

culture

build

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world. If there is a nation which only

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on practical profession and

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nothing about the

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, it could become a boring and stressful place

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Culture

deeply

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roots in

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, the foods, clothes and festivals, all of these elements create

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lives.

Furthermore

, unique

culture

and

arts

can not only make

people

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the governments can get benefits from tourism. In conclusion,

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culture

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exciting lifestyle and maintain

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psychological health for the

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, these are the main reasons for me to financially support the development in these fields.

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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

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Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

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Grammatical Range: 4.0

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societal welfare
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future prosperity
heritage and identity
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Increasingly, many governments around the world are choosing to provide greater funding for scientific and technological development rather than investing in arts and culture. Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

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Nowadays more and more people want things instantly(eg: goods, service, news).Why is this? It is a positive or negative development?

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