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Many adults think that childhood and schooldays are the best years of a person's life. That is reason for this? do you agree or disgree

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Undoubtedly,
childhood
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the childhood
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 period is
golden
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the golden
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 period of
life
. Some individuals have the belief that
childhood
time
 is the golden
time
 of
life
.
Therefore
, I
accord
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 with
this
 assertion completely. In
upcoming
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the upcoming
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 composition, I will elaborate more
about
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this
 in detail. To commence with, various reasons could be shown to prove my perception. First of all, freedom from financial burden and
that is
 what makes
life
 of a person convenient. In detail, as a teenager financial reliability is completely on guardians and children have no sense of responsibility regarding house mortgage, groceries and buying
apparels
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 and the only job they need to
fulfill
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fulfil
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 is doing academic study and sleeping well.
Additionally
, innocence and lack of shyness during
early
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an early
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 age
makes
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life
 more favorable because kids have no knowledge of getting shamed and they perform with confidence in society.
For instance
,
generally
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generally,
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 it can be seen that
human-beings
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human beings
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 are more confident and willing
of participating
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to participate
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 in co-curriculum activities during academic years as compared to university years.
Hence
, innocence and lack of sense of responsibility
leads
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lead
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 to
easy
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an easy
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 path
of
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in
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life
. Except
this
, real and good friend
circle
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circles
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 in
childhood
works
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work
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 as the cherry on top because
human-beings
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human beings
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 are social animals which means people need company in their
life
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lives
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 and as a
children
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child
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 making good friends is very easy.
Moreover
, children receive unconditional love
whereas
, as an adult in order to receive love a person
have
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has
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 to offer something in exchange. To exemplify,
the
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apply
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ailments like depression can be only seen in adults and
this
 illness is caused by loneliness.
Thus
,
happy
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a happy
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 friend circle can be found during
childhood
.
However
,
the
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adult
life
 cannot be overlooked because
this
 phase of
life
 has its own pros
such
 as decision-making independency and willingness to achieve things that you once dreamt about. Daily new challenges and struggles make
life
worthy
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worthwhile
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 as you gather memories during
struggling
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the struggling
a struggling
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time
 period.
Therefore
,
mature
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a mature
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life
 has its own significance. To recapitulate, as per the aforementioned factors it can be concluded that without any doubt it can be said that adult
life
 has
it's
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its
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 own significance in
life
 but I personally feel that
childhood
 is
best
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the best
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time
 of
life
.
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Ensure a clear thesis statement in the introduction to directly address the essay prompt.
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Be specific and provide clear examples to support each point.
coherence cohesion
Organize the essay into clear paragraphs with distinct main ideas and supporting details.
coherence cohesion
Use a range of linking words and phrases to connect ideas and paragraphs, but avoid overusing them.
coherence cohesion
End the essay with a clear conclusion that summarises the main points and restates your position.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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