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The table below gives information about the average annual spending of university students in three different countries.

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The table below gives information about the average annual spending of university students in three different countries.
The table
describe
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 information about the average annual spending of university students in
Country
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 A,
Country
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B
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 and
Country
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C
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.
Overall
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, university students spend different spending
level
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levels
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,
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.
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Country
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 A’s students spend more money than
Country
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B
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 and
Country
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C
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. The largest percentage of spending falls into
accomodation
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accommodation
 and food. As
it
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apply
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can
clearly
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 seen
form
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from
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 the table, the total spending
are
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is
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 different in each
countries
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country
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.
Country
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 A takes the highest cost of 5000$ ,
Country
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B
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 of 4500$ and
Coutry
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Country
C
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 is the lowest of 1500$. For
accomodation
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accommodation
,
studnets
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students
 in
Country
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 A had the highest
prportion
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proportion
 at 45% and
Country
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B
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 and
Country
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C
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 respectively at 35% and 30%. Food expenditure in
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C
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are
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is
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 the highest ai 36%,
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B
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at
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is at
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 28%
and
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, and
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Country
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 A is the lowest at 22%.
Country
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C Spending
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C's spending
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 level
at
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 books is the highest at 21%, much
more
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higher than
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B
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 and
C
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, which
at
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 9% and 3%. In
term
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terms
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 of leisure,
Country
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B
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 take the highest
porportion
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proportion
 at 23%,
compare
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compared
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 to
Country
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 A at 22% and
Country
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C
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 at 21%. Other activities have
Country
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 A at 5% of total spending,
Country
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B
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 at 5%,
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Country
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C
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 at 1%.

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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words country, b, c with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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