The map below shows the changes that have taken place at the waterfront area of a town called Darwin between 2009 and 2014.

The map below shows the changes that have taken place at the waterfront area of a town called Darwin between 2009 and 2014.
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the development
at
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the waterfront area in
a
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Darwin town
since
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2009 to 2014 It is immediately noticeable that
industrial
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the industrial
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area was demolished and replaced by
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a swiming
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swiming
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swimming
pool .
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significant change was observed by adding
harbour
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a harbour
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on the sea . Industrial
zone
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had been
tranfsormed
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transformed
into green spaces .
Also
between trees had been equipped the footpath which connected
harbour
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and artificial forest .
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the
amout
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amount
of residential
building
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buildings
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increased in 5 years for 3 to 6 .
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,
instead
industrial
zone
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zones
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had
builted
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built
new education
building
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buildings
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such
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as university
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university
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. It is obvious , that some location of facilities has not changed .
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location
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of
2
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swimming pool still remain the same .
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,
convention
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center
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, fishing zone and school
has
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not
replaced
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. Looking from the
overall
perspective , it is notable that Darwin
village
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has developed by adding
a new facilities
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.
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