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The graph below shows the number of tourists visting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where revelant.

The graph below shows the number of tourists visting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where revelant.
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The line graph illustrates the
number
 of
visitors
in
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to
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 a Caribbean island from 2010 to 2017.
Overall
, the total
number
 of
visitors
 continued to
rose
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rise
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 each year.
In addition
,
people
prefered
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preferred
 to stay on
island
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the island
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 than on cruise
ships
. In 2010,
visitors
 staying on cruise
ships
 were below 0.5
million
,
while
people
 staying on land were approximately 0.75
million
.
As a result
, the total
number
 of
visitors
 is 1
million
. In the following years, cruise
ships
 which
prefered
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preferred
were
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fluctuated and
reach
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reached
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 0.5
million
 in 2013, whilst
people
 who
staying
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stayed
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 on land increased to 1.5
million
 in 2013 and the total
number
tourists
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of tourists
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were
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was
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 2
million
 within 2013. In 2014, tourists who stayed on
ships
 gradually grew up and
peak
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peaked
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 at 2
million
visitors
 in 2017.
However
,
people
 staying on
island
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the island
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 remained stable
as in
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from
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 2013 until 2015 and dropped
around
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to around
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 0.5
million
 in 2016 and increased to the same
number
.
Additionally
, the total
number
 of tourists rose significantly and peaked at 3.5
million
 in 2017.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, visitors, people, ships, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stay" was used 2 times.
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