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The graph below shows the number of tourists visting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where revelant.

The graph below shows the number of tourists visting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where revelant.
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The line graph illustrates the
number
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 of
visitors
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in
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to
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 a Caribbean island from 2010 to 2017.
Overall
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, the total
number
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 of
visitors
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 continued to
rose
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rise
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 each year.
In addition
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,
people
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prefered
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preferred
 to stay on
island
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the island
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 than on cruise
ships
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. In 2010,
visitors
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 staying on cruise
ships
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 were below 0.5
million
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,
while
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people
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 staying on land were approximately 0.75
million
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.
As a result
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, the total
number
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 of
visitors
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 is 1
million
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. In the following years, cruise
ships
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 which
prefered
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preferred
were
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fluctuated and
reach
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reached
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 0.5
million
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 in 2013, whilst
people
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 who
staying
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stayed
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 on land increased to 1.5
million
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 in 2013 and the total
number
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tourists
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of tourists
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were
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was
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 2
million
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 within 2013. In 2014, tourists who stayed on
ships
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 gradually grew up and
peak
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peaked
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 at 2
million
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visitors
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 in 2017.
However
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,
people
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 staying on
island
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the island
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 remained stable
as in
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from
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 2013 until 2015 and dropped
around
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to around
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 0.5
million
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 in 2016 and increased to the same
number
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.
Additionally
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, the total
number
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 of tourists rose significantly and peaked at 3.5
million
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 in 2017.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, visitors, people, ships, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stay" was used 2 times.
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