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Scientists have been warning for many years about protecting the environment and that we should limit the use of energy in our daily lives. Despite these warnings, many people do not do this. What are the reasons for that and how people can be encouraged to take an interest in protecting the environment?

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Scientists have been advocating that it is necessary to limit the
use
 of
Energy
 in our daily lives to protect the environment. Despite
this
, the
Use
 of
Energy
 has not lessened and in my opinion, it is
due to
 the fact that
people
 prefer to
use
 the facilities they have access to
instead
 of making compromises for the benefit of the environment.
For
this
 reason, I think that it is necessary for them to understand the importance of their action and
also
governements
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governments
government
 can have a role in that. On the one hand,
people
 know what are environmentally friendly behaviors that can have a positive impact on life on our Earth.
However
, these behaviours require a certain amount of sacrifice in the way we live our
life
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lives
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. When it comes to
reduce
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reducing
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 the amount of
Energy
 we
Use
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use
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 in our daily lives we are asking
people
 to affect what are nowadays unchangeable habits. We get so used to all of our electric devices that it would be really difficult to do our things without them.
On the other hand
, it is not completely impossible to foster a change in
people
’s habits. Giving emphasis to the consequences of that could be a first way to inspire a chance,
in particular
 in those who mostly care about
this
 problem. Alternatively, governments can ramp up their efforts in forcing changes in those behaviours if not possibly
otherwise
. Through new laws, it can be reduced the amount of
Energy
 used.
For example
, in Europe the parliament have signed a law about the purpose of reducing building
Energy
use
 and through solar panels create independent buildings and less polluting.
To conclude
, I personally believe that it is difficult to ask
people
 to give up on comfort and facilities for something that sometimes seems so distant to them but as the scientists have emphasized it is important that everybody give their support in reducing the
Use
 of
Energy
 in their daily lives.
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You have addressed all parts of the task, providing reasons why people do not limit their energy use and suggesting ways to encourage better environmental practices.
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