The chart below shows the expenditure of two countries on consumer goods in 2010.

The chart below shows the expenditure of two countries on consumer goods in 2010.
The bar chart provides data about the expenditure of
France
and the United
Kingdom
on consumer goods in 2010.
Overall
, both countries spent the most
of
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money
on cars and
France
spent the lowest amount of
money
on cameras,
whereas
, the United
Kingdom
spent the lowest amount of
money
on perfume. As can clearly be seen, both countries spent the most of
money
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on cars
France
spent 400000
pounds
sterling and the United
Kingdom
spent 450000
pounds
sterling.
France
spent roughly 370000
pounds
sterling on computers,
while
, the United
Kingdom
only spent 350000
pounds
sterling.
Both
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Neither
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France
and
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nor
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the United
Kingdom
did not
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spend
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spent
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much on perfume,
France
only spent 200000
pounds
sterling and the United
Kingdom
spent less than 150000
pounds
sterling which had the lowest expenditure compared to other consumer goods.
France
spent the lowest amount of
money
on cameras(150000
pounds
sterling),
however
, the United
Kingdom
spent 350000
pounds
sterling on cameras.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words france, kingdom, money, pounds with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 3 times.

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  • expenditure
  • consumer goods
  • chart
  • countries
  • overall
  • compare
  • analyze
  • categories
  • consumer spending
  • trends
  • proportions
  • statistics
  • increase
  • decrease
  • significant
  • notable
  • remarkable
  • substantial
  • considerable
  • determine
  • conclude
  • in conclusion
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