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The chart below shows the expenditure of two countries on consumer goods in 2010.

The chart below shows the expenditure of two countries on consumer goods in 2010.
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The bar chart provides data about the expenditure of
France
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 and the United
Kingdom
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 on consumer goods in 2010.
Overall
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, both countries spent the most
of
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money
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 on cars and
France
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 spent the lowest amount of
money
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 on cameras,
whereas
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, the United
Kingdom
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 spent the lowest amount of
money
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 on perfume. As can clearly be seen, both countries spent the most of
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money
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their money
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 on cars
France
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 spent 400000
pounds
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 sterling and the United
Kingdom
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 spent 450000
pounds
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 sterling.
France
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 spent roughly 370000
pounds
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 sterling on computers,
while
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, the United
Kingdom
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 only spent 350000
pounds
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 sterling.
Both
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Neither
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France
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and
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nor
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 the United
Kingdom
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did not
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apply
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spend
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spent
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 much on perfume,
France
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 only spent 200000
pounds
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 sterling and the United
Kingdom
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 spent less than 150000
pounds
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 sterling which had the lowest expenditure compared to other consumer goods.
France
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 spent the lowest amount of
money
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 on cameras(150000
pounds
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 sterling),
however
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, the United
Kingdom
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 spent 350000
pounds
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 sterling on cameras.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words france, kingdom, money, pounds with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • expenditure
  • consumer goods
  • chart
  • countries
  • overall
  • compare
  • analyze
  • categories
  • consumer spending
  • trends
  • proportions
  • statistics
  • increase
  • decrease
  • significant
  • notable
  • remarkable
  • substantial
  • considerable
  • determine
  • conclude
  • in conclusion
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