IELTS Writing Correction Service
Writing Samples
Band 7

The charts below shows the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one ocuntry between 1920 and 2019. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

The charts below shows the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one ocuntry between 1920 and 2019. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
#changes #ownership #appliances #amount #time #housework #households #ocuntry #information #features #comparisons
✨ Do you want to improve your IELTS writing?
The line graphs compare the percentage of having electrical appliances
such
Linking Words
 as washing
machine
Fix the agreement mistake
machines
show examples
, refrigerators ,and vacuum cleaners. And the time spent doing
chore
Fix the agreement mistake
chores
show examples
 in one nation from 1920 to 2019.
Overall
Linking Words
,
although
Linking Words
 the washing machine was
initially
Linking Words
 the most electrical appliance they used , it was overtaken by a vacuum cleaner throughout the period.Meanwhile,the number of
hours
Use synonyms
 spent in the first year was the highest and decreased during the years . In the first year , washing
machine
Fix the agreement mistake
machines
show examples
 had the highest proportion around 40% , after which it experienced a gradual increase from 1940 to 1960 about 60 and 70 %, respectively.
In contrast
Linking Words
, refrigerators showed a dramatic rise in the beginning from 0 % in 1920 to 100% in 1960 , after that it remained steady until the end of the period.
Furthermore
Linking Words
, the
hours
Use synonyms
 were spent in 1920 around 50
hours
Use synonyms
 per week , which was followed by a gradual decrease in the next two years to about 30
hours
Use synonyms
 per week. The year 2019 showed the lowest number of
hours
Use synonyms
 spent in-house work about 10
hours
Use synonyms
 per week.
Submitted by wesalalrwthy on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Vocabulary: Replace the words hours with synonyms.
▼
Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 2 times.
▼
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
▼
Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
▼
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
▼
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
▼
Vocabulary: The word "gradual" was used 2 times.
▼
What to do next:
Look at other essays: