It is generally believed that some people are born with certain talents, for instance for sport or music, and others are not. However, it is sometimes claimed that any child can be taught to become a good sports person or musician

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are born with special
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as God's gift
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music or sports, but others can be
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expert
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learning or practical training. I believe that both of them can happen, for those who have
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ability
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people
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natural
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that some
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have their own unique things to show their characteristics as
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, if they or their closest
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have realized and decided to develop their skill, it
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that they have been talented
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can not be useful and not
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their life.
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age, they prefer to train and develop
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children
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talents
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by facilitating them, inviting certain
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tutors
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that
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have been
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expert
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in related
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children
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ability is
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example singing,
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etc.
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some of them have no natural
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or talent in related
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that they
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can join
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routine practice. In summary,
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born with
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opportunity to be an
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talents
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Task Response
Your essay partially addresses the task, as it discusses both natural talent and the ability to develop skills. However, it lacks a concrete stance or clear opinion throughout the piece. Furthermore, you have not fully developed all parts of the prompt. To improve, make sure your position is clear from the beginning and remains consistent. Aim to fully explore all aspects of the question asked.
Coherence and Cohesion
The organization of the essay requires improvement. The logical development of ideas can be enhanced by establishing clearer connections between paragraphs and maintaining topic sentences that guide the reader through your argument. Use a wider range of cohesive devices (e.g., 'Furthermore,' 'In contrast,' 'As such') and paragraphing techniques to structure your writing more effectively, ensuring each paragraph presents a single clear idea supported by relevant examples.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Innate talent
  • Nurture
  • Prodigy
  • Proficiency
  • Deliberate practice
  • Physiological factors
  • Grit
  • Perseverance
  • Cultural norms
  • Structured training
  • Physical predisposition
  • Natural aptitude
  • Dedicated training
  • Societal influence
  • Passion
  • Genetic endowment
  • Skill acquisition
  • Expertise
  • Extracurricular activities
  • Mastery
  • Cognitive abilities
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