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The map below show an industrial area in the town of Norbiton, and planned future development of the site. Write at least 150 words.

The map below show an industrial area in the town of Norbiton, and planned future development of the site. Write at least 150 words.
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The given
map
depict
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 an industrial area in the town of Norbiton in the present time and a plan
of
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for
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 future
development
.
Main
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The main
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 areas on the
map
 are
a
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farmland, a
river
 and an industrial area
itself
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.
Additionally
, a town is illustrated as
line
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a line
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 on the west side of the
map
. Currently, an industrial area is presented with several numbers of factory buildings. These factories are located around a road and a circle part of it. In the future,
according
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 the planned
development
,
instead
 of a factory will be build a housing place. The
map
 shows that part of
houses
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the houses
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 will be located
accross
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across
 the
river
on
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in
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 the North,
hence
here
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there
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 will be a bridge. A playground and a school are located on the east part of the
map
. There are two new buildings
nearby
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near
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 the circle road in the center of the
map
.
According to
 the plan
of
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a
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future
development
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development,
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 there are shops and a medical centre.
Summarise
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 the changes, here is a big
development
 in
a
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farmland. Housing with the school, shops and
the
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medical
center
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centre
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 replace factory buildings. Changes will
also
 touch the
river
, with
new
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a new
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 bridge and an additional house
accross
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across
 the
river
.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words map, development, river with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "map" was used 6 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "present" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
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