The chart below shows global sales of the top five mobile phone brands between 2009 and 2013.

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The pie chart illustrates the amount of money earned by selling products in the five well-known companies including Samsung, Apple,

Nokia

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, LG and ZTLE from 2009 to 2013.

Overall

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Nokia

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accounted for the most popular brand over the period shown

while

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ZTE

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sales

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were the lowest among others.

Nokia

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had earned the highest amount of money until 2011,

whereas

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Apple and

ZTE

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had the least number of customers.

Similarly

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ZTE

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sales

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were the least in 2013 as opposed to LG. In terms of the Samsung brand, in 20013 it became the most popular company (with around 450

million

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sales

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). In 2009,

Nokia

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sales

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were the highest at approximately 450

million

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. Despite the minimal decrease of 10

million

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in 2013, it was still the most popular.

On the other hand

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, Apple accounted for the lowest

sales

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in 2009.

Although

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ZTE

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sales

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were the lowest in 2011 at 50

million

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and its popularity remained constant in 20013, there was a marginal increase of less than 1

million

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Accurate spelling & word formation

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Global sales
Mobile phone brands
Market share
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The chart below shows global sales of the top five mobile phone brands between 2009 and 2013.

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Why is marine life important and how can it be protected?

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