Luck has nothing to do with success. Do you agree or disagree with the quotation above? Use specific reasons and examples to explain your position.
When individuals achieve it is because of hard
work
. Luck
is not related to advance. While
some people
claim if people
succeed in their fields, they have luck
in achievement. My opinion is irrelevant with luck
.
Regarding this
topic, Many reasons support that success isn’t related to luck
. First,
central to the argument for hard work
is the belief that persistent effort
, discipline, and dedication are the primary drivers of achievement. For example
, In South Korea, there is a sentence about Time betrays no one there. When crowd work
with persistence and effort
, they will obviously succeed in their fields. Because they have many things, such
as business skills, drawing ability in the art, and better knowledge rather than fewer effort
persons.
Second,
accomplishment often requires a high level of skill and experience. For instance
, major companies and governments need to skilled community with talent. Such
as hardworking athletes has
been studied for their ability and advance of more than 10,000 hours. So, they can well perform than other athletes.
Change the verb form
have
On the other hand
, when thinking of this
reason, if we think of Opportunities and Timing or having background. While
hard work
is crucial, a nation cannot ignore opportunities. Such
as meeting a mentor at the right time and in the right place, and encountering a breakthrough idea. These factors lead to success more easily than nothing. Finally
, the luck
is more likely to operate depending on the background. Even if the population have high-quality skills and talent, it is difficult for them to succeed if they don’t have money to implement their plans. For example
, in an undeveloped country, there are many people
who have persons with physical ability. However
, they cannot exercise because they don’t have money to buy sports equipment.
People
who believe that success is related to luck
, claim it is important for them to succeed with persistence, effort
and skill development. However
, other opinions argue that it is important to succeed considering timing, opportunities and background
When considering all of these points in mind. In conclusion, after considering these points. In my opinion, I think that people
can succeed with effort
and intelligence development.Submitted by rjsdn2233 on
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