The follawing bar charts shows the different modes transport used to travel to and from work in one Europian city in 1960 , 1980 and 2000

The follawing bar charts shows the different modes transport used to travel to and from work in one Europian city in 1960 , 1980 and 2000
The bar chart illustrates using percentage of four different vehicles in cities of Europe in 1960-2000.
Overall
, in 2000
users
of
car
and in 1960
users
of
foot
was the highest one. Meanwhile, all transport mode in 1960 was similar. In 1960 total travellers of bus was 18%
that
Correct pronoun usage
which
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is less
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than then
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then
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the
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bike percentage that are 25%. The
bus
Correct quantifier usage
number of bus
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users
increased during the next 20 years and
account
Wrong verb form
accounted
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just
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for just
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over 25%, even more than
Correct article usage
the bike's
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bike's
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bike
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total number.
Also
, in the next 2
decade
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decades
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the per cent of
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the bus
a bus
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bus
Fix the agreement mistake
buses
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in 2000 that
caunt
Correct your spelling
count
approximately 17%, they were 3 times more
then
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than
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the
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apply
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bike
use
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used
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in
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apply
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this
year. In 2000 travelling by
car
was higher than
other
Correct article usage
the other
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2 groups of
year
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the year
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. They peaked at over 35%
that
Correct pronoun usage
which
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is more
4
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than 4
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times than usage in
foot
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feet
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in 2000.
However
, in 1960
foot
users
was
on the contrary
more
then
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than
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number of
car
for 6 times.
On the other hand
,
usage
Correct article usage
the usage
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number of
this
Correct determiner usage
these
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2 transports in 1980
do
Correct subject-verb agreement
does
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not have
such
big
differencies
Correct your spelling
differences
difference
. The
car
more for only 5% than
foot
Add an article
a foot
the foot
show examples
.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "that is".
Vocabulary: Replace the words users, car, foot with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.

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