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Band 6.5

You are applying for a job and need a letter of reference from someone who knew you when you were at college. Write a letter to one of your old teachers asking for a reference. In your letter: say what job you have applied for explain why you want this job suggest what information the teacher should include

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Dear Mr John, My name is Jee, and I was one of your students with whom you shared your knowledge and expertise by teaching various concepts at Manchester University. Today, I am writing
this
 email to request a favour regarding my
Job
 application as my company needed a letter of reference to provide an employment
opportunity
. I have been looking for a
job
opportunity
 for
such
 a long time and I eventually got an offer from a software company for the Junior Engineer position.
In addition
, I must convey that the
job
 market was quite competitive in
this
 field and it was very difficult to secure a
job
 offer.
Furthermore
, my organisation has requested a reference letter to confirm my
opportunity
 as I received much appreciation from you, I thought I would request you to write a reference letter for me. I kindly request you to mention my strengths and weaknesses,
therefore
, I will get an
opportunity
 to work in my dream
job
. I look forward to hearing your response at your earliest convenience. yours sincerely, jee
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Coherence & Cohesion
Make sure that each paragraph presents a clear central idea. The letter could benefit from clearer delineation of points.
Coherence & Cohesion
To improve logical structure, consider streamlining the content and ensuring each paragraph transitions smoothly to the next.
Coherence & Cohesion
Ensure that the greeting and closing are appropriate for the type of letter. Remember to use a comma after the salutation and closing.
Task Achievement
Address all parts of the task sufficiently. Make sure to include specific reasons why you want the job you have applied for.
Task Achievement
Aim for a consistent formal tone throughout the letter, as this will add to its overall professionalism.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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