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Bar graph below shows the amount of carbon emissions in different countries during three different years.

Bar graph below shows the amount of carbon emissions in different countries during three different years.
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The given bar graph
demonstates
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demonstrates
 the
amount
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 of
carbon
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 emission in different
countries
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 during the
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year
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years
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 1990,1975 and 2005. In all the above graphs the
amount
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 of
carbon
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 produced in
USA
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the USA
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 has the highest of all other
countries
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 like Germany,
United
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the United
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Kingdom
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 ,China ,
Canada
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 and
in
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India
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. In 1975,
India
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has
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 the least
amount
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 of
carbon
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 emission
as
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below 200,000
thousand
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 metric
tonnes
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 than any other
countries
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 . In the same
year
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Canada
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 and
United
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the United
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Kingdom
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 , the
carbon
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 emissions
precentage
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percentage
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was
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 below 200,000
thousand
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tonnes
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. In the
year
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 1990, in China and in
USA
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the USA
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, the
amount
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 of
carbon
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 emitted
is
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was
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 more than 600,000
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tonnes
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 .
This
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 is
high
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higher
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 than
countries
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 like Germany
Canada
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 ,
United
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the United
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Kingdom
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 and
in
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India
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.
USA
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The USA
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have
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had
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 the highest
amount
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 of
carbon
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 emitted in the
year
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 2005
by
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approximately 1600,000
thousand
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tonnes
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. In
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India
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India,
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 the
amount
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 of gas emitted has increased in the
year
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 2005 than 1990 and 1975 .
However
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, in
Canada
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 and
United
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the United
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Kingdom
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Kingdom,
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 the
amount
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 of
carbon
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 emission was below 200,000
thousand
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tonnes
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in
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every
year
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 than any other
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countries
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country
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.

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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words amount, carbon, countries, year, kingdom, canada, india, thousand, tonnes with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "amount" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 7 times.
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