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Bar graph below shows the amount of carbon emissions in different countries during three different years.

Bar graph below shows the amount of carbon emissions in different countries during three different years.
#bar #amount #carbon #emissions #countries #three #years
The given bar graph
demonstates
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demonstrates
 the
amount
 of
carbon
 emission in different
countries
 during the
year
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years
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 1990,1975 and 2005. In all the above graphs the
amount
 of
carbon
 produced in
USA
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the USA
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 has the highest of all other
countries
 like Germany,
United
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the United
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Kingdom
 ,China ,
Canada
 and
in
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India
. In 1975,
India
has
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had
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 the least
amount
 of
carbon
 emission
as
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below 200,000
thousand
 metric
tonnes
 than any other
countries
 . In the same
year
Canada
 and
United
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the United
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Kingdom
 , the
carbon
 emissions
precentage
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percentage
is
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was
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 below 200,000
thousand
 metric
tonnes
. In the
year
 1990, in China and in
USA
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the USA
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, the
amount
 of
carbon
 emitted
is
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was
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 more than 600,000
thousand
 metric
tonnes
 .
This
 is
high
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higher
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 than
countries
 like Germany
Canada
 ,
United
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the United
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Kingdom
 and
in
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apply
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India
.
USA
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The USA
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have
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had
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 the highest
amount
 of
carbon
 emitted in the
year
 2005
by
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approximately 1600,000
thousand
 metric
tonnes
. In
India
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India,
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 the
amount
 of gas emitted has increased in the
year
 2005 than 1990 and 1975 .
However
, in
Canada
 and
United
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the United
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Kingdom
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Kingdom,
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 the
amount
 of
carbon
 emission was below 200,000
thousand
 metric
tonnes
in
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every
year
 than any other
countries
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country
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.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words amount, carbon, countries, year, kingdom, canada, india, thousand, tonnes with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "amount" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 7 times.
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