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The world is consuming natural resources faster than they can be renewed. Therefore, it is important that products are made to last. Governments should discourage people from constantly buying up-to-date or fashionable products. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Natural
resources
 are being used up by humanity more quickly than they can be replenished.
For
this
 reason,it is critical that goods are built to
last
.Governments ought to dissuade citizens from continuously purchasing trendy or up-to-date goods.People should be advised by the government not to buy products in fashion or luxurious brand items frequently in order to conserve our
resources
.I do agree with
this
 opinion and will support my point of view in
this
 essay. First of all, the Earth's
resources
 are finite, and it is crucial that we conserve and manage them wisely if we want to survive
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 the future. People can witness the annual launch of a new company or even a product from an established brand in
this
 cutthroat world.
For instance
, a lot of corporations and well-known brands,
such
 as Apple, Samsung, Ferrari, BMW, and others, release new phones, computers, or cars each year in an effort to draw customers and grow their businesses.
However
,
this
 results in the wasteful
use
 of natural
resources
 both during the production of goods and during their post-sale
use
.
In addition
, people are jeopardizing their own futures
as a result
 of
this
behavior
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. Concerns about climate change and global warming have grown during the past few years. Nearly ten endangered animal species have vanished from the planet
as a result
 of these changes in the
last
 five years,
according to
 a Nature report.
Furthermore
, because of the imbalance between the creation and
use
 of natural
resources
, there are indirect effects on the ecosystem, flora, and fauna, which ultimately affects humans. I fully support that the public should be made aware of the need to
use
 products and natural
resources
 responsibly by the government.
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task achievement
Make sure your introduction fully addresses the question and includes a clear opinion statement to set the stage for your argument.
task achievement
Elaborate on your main points by providing more detailed examples and explanations to better support your argument and to demonstrate a wider range of language skills.
coherence cohesion
Use a variety of cohesive devices and paragraphing effectively to improve the logical flow of your essay. This helps the reader to follow your ideas more coherently.
coherence cohesion
Ensure each paragraph has a clear central topic and that the supporting sentences are relevant to this topic. This enhances the clarity of your ideas.
coherence cohesion
To improve your score, provide a conclusion that summarises your main points and restate your opinion more clearly. This solidifies your standpoint and provides a sense of closure to the reader.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • sustainable practices
  • resource depletion
  • long-lasting goods
  • fast consumerism
  • environmental impact
  • planned obsolescence
  • consumer awareness
  • sharing economy
  • repair culture
  • government intervention
  • economic implications
  • conservation-minded
  • sustainable materials
  • production methods
  • environmental protection
  • personal freedom
  • collective responsibility
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