the chart below gives information about how gamilies in once country spen their weekly income in 1968 and in 2018

the chart below gives information about how gamilies in once country spen their weekly income in 1968 and in 2018
The given bar chart illustrates the weekly average expenses of families in 1968 and 2018. Values are shown in
percentage
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.
Overall
, in 2018 highest
expensed
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on food
while
the least
expensed
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for fuel
and
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power and personal goods. In 1968, housing and clothing and
footware
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footwear
expenses
was
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similar which was 10%.
According to
this
chart food (35%) was the most
spend
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item in 1968 and leisure (22%) was the most
spend
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item in 2018. For household items both years spent the same
percentage
of income it was
accounted
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around
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7.5% . In 2018, families used
the
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similar
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from
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the
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income for transport, household and personal goods ( 8%). When compared 1968
percentage
of food
expense
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expenses
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35% decreased by half in 2018 to 17.5%
in contrast
, people spent for leisure in 2018 was doubled which was more than 20%. Housing, transport and leisure expenses have increased in 2018 compared to 1968. In 1968, fuel was the lowest expense in
this
country.
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Basic structure: Change the fifth paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words percentage with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "compared" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fifth paragraph.
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