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Many people feel it is a waste of money to try to save endangered animal species,for example the tiger or the blue whale. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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 their opinion, that saving
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 habitats of animals is extremely expensive,
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such
 as the tiger or the blue whale. In my opinion, they do not think about problems after that. To start with, if people stop
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for
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 keep endangered species alive, the death rate of creatures will
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 sharply step by step with symbiosis and population. On
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 each other, and symbiosis between organisms
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 very important, and care
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 of funds. In fact,
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corporations still
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animals and support system of
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 in our world, to keep alive us.
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, blue whales are ‘eating’ carbon dioxide, which is harmful
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 human health, and when whales die and dive
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, they take it with them. Another
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 of our planet we had a huge number of situations
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 when a number of spices after a pair of years became important for humanity and science. What is more, each type is a one million years evolution from another, older animal, who tried to still alive, but at the final point died
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 DNA, which could be useful for scientists.
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 sibling of
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 chicken – Dodo had hunted before all
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 their importance. The same story is with groups with tigers, whose universities are trying to bring to us again. In conclusion, if we stop to try save rare types of
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, very soon we will die
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 own egoism.
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 ecosystem is more important
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 we may know.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • endangered species
  • biodiversity
  • intrinsic value
  • existential threat
  • ecosystem
  • conservation
  • economic benefits
  • funding allocation
  • competing needs
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