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the chart below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019

the chart below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019
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The given line charts illustrate the proportion of household that owns electrical appliances
such
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 as washing machine, refrigerator and vacuum cleaner and how many
hours
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 were spent doing house chores from 1920 to 2019.
Overall
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, it is evident that ownership of those machines was increasing throughout the
period
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.
In contrast
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, the number of
hours
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 spent doing chores at home was declining. Drastic growth was observed for refrigerator ownership. It started with 0% ownership in 1920 and rose significantly to be owned by more than half of the population over the
period
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 of 20 years.
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, the figure reached full adoption in 1980.
On the other hand
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, washing machines owned by 40% of the population at the beginning of the
period
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, the trend fluctuated but only reached its peak of around three-quarters by the end of the
period
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. Meanwhile, with lower adoption compared with washing machines, vacuum cleaners, purchased and owned by only 30% in 1920, had a consistent rise and easily achieved full adoption in 2000. In 1920, housework took at least 50
hours
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 weekly to complete, the figure plummeted and only took around 20
hours
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 in the year 1960. Despite no significant reduction between 1980 and 2000, the figure decreased and consumed
about
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more than 10
hours
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 weekly by the end of the
period
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.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words hours, period with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significantly" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • ownership
  • electrical appliances
  • housework
  • time frame
  • variables
  • trends
  • significant milestones
  • turning points
  • correlation
  • reduction
  • influenced
  • societal implications
  • quality of life
  • gender roles
  • economic implications
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