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Band 6.5

A museum near your home is looking for people to do a part-time voluntary unpaid job. You would like to do some voluntary unpaid work at the museum. Write a letter to the museum Director to apply for the voluntary unpaid work. in your letter - explain why you want to do voluntary unpaid work at the museum - describe some skills and qualities you have that would be useful - give details of when you would be available for work

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Dear Sir, I hope
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 letter finds you well. I am writing to express my interest in doing unpaid volunteer work at your museum. I take a keen interest in history, want to enrich my knowledge by learning more about ancient objects.
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 museum is a new development in our area, and you have brought several antique pieces from foreign countries.
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, I want to work as a volunteer. I have one year of experience at a city museum. I know how to manage long queues of visitors, help them to clear their doubts, and satisfy them by answering all their queries. I am fully dedicated to my responsibilities, enjoy
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organising
 things effectively, and maintain
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 attitude
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 at work. I am usually free on weekends, or
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, I am ready to take evening shifts on
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, especially after 5 o'clock. I would be truly grateful to you if you consider me
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a valuable candidate. I look forward to hearing from you soon! Yours faithfully, Sam

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task response
For task response: You answer all parts of the task, but you can add a little more detail about why this museum is right for you.
task response
For task response: Your tone is polite and right for a formal letter. Try to make one or two lines sound more natural and clear.
coherence and cohesion
For coherence and cohesion: Your letter has a clear start, middle, and end, so it is easy to follow.
coherence and cohesion
For coherence and cohesion: Most paragraphs have one main idea, but some sentences can link more smoothly.
task response
For task response: You clearly say why you want the role, what skills you have, and when you can work.
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For task response: The letter keeps a formal and respectful style from start to end.
coherence and cohesion
For coherence and cohesion: The ideas are in a good order and the letter format is correct.
coherence and cohesion
For coherence and cohesion: Each paragraph has a clear purpose, which helps the reader.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Voluntary unpaid work
  • Museum Director
  • Intention
  • Contribute
  • Community
  • Art
  • History
  • Skills
  • Qualities
  • Communication
  • Organization
  • Attention to detail
  • Passion
  • Learning
  • Teamwork
  • Availability
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