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The maps below show a science park in 2008 and the same park today.

The maps below show a science park in 2008 and the same park today.
#maps #show #science #park
There were four different places in
Science
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the Science
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park
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Park
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,
however
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,
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they changed different species today.
Overall
, The two
map
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maps
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 show changes to
Science
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the Science
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park
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Park
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.The most
obviously
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obvious
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 exchange is that there wasnʼt
any
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no
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 building in front of
Offices
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the Offices
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 and Reception,
however
 the University, Research and
development centre
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Development Centre
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 is built by people. The second main change is that there was
a
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an
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 IT centre
wich
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which
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 is covered by trees moved to
Innovation
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the Innovation
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 centre today.
As well as
 the station
have
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was
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 built during the situation.Another important change is
the
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apply
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Cyber security.Before it was small, but now it
expand
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has expanded
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.
In addition
to
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apply
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there werenʼt any bus stops,
cycle
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or cycle
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 paths in 2008 and they are built by people today.The bus stop
located
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is located
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in eastern
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eastern
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Eastern
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 Science
park
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Park
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 and
cycle
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the cycle
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 path
situated
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is situated
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 in front of
bus
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the bus
a bus
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 stop.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "changed" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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