Some people think media should be allowed to publicize information on someone’s private life. Some others believe that media should be regulated in this regard. Discuss both views and give your opinion. Give reasons for your answers and relevant examples.
At present, technology has been advanced in many fields, especially the
comminication
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communication
sectors
. A few think that channels should be Fix the agreement mistake
sector
permited
to announce details on Correct your spelling
permitted
people
's confidential matters
who are being celebrity
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celebrities
while
others opine that media
should be needed
some controlling power to avoid these kinds of adverse effects. I will discuss both views and Wrong verb form
have
also
state my perspectivce
as the conclusion.
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perspective
To begin
with, celebrities
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celebrities'
celebrity's
lifestyle
are being on Fix the agreement mistake
lifestyles
public
eye at all Add an article
the public
time
because Fix the agreement mistake
times
people
desire to know about someone
's private matters
how is going on whether personal or professional. Common folks have more expectations to know about fame mankind's confidential details as compared to their career information, as a result
, media
should Correct article usage
the media
be revealed
their private Wrong verb form
reveal
datas
on Correct your spelling
data
channel
. Add an article
the channel
a channel
For example
, a famous cricketer Mr Sachin Tendulkar life
always watches
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watched
from
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by
public
, Add an article
the public
therefore
, means of communication wants to explore his day-to-day activities on their channel to
public watch. Change preposition
for
Hence
, mode
of expression should be granted to reveal Correct article usage
a mode
someone
's personal life
information.
In contrast
, means of communication should be controlled to release one's personal details on channels because their confidential matters
are not significant for
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to
people
. Their carrer
and professional-based on stories only Correct your spelling
career
people
should know besides
anything else is unwanted, in addition
, this
can bring more negative influence to mankind. For instance
, a famous cricket Mr Sachin Tendulkar has dropped
middle school in his childhood period, Wrong verb form
was out of
this
can create a negative influence among
teens. Change preposition
on
Therefore
, media
should be modulated from their rules and regulations.
To conclude
, channels should be exposed to someone
's secret data to public
eye in order to folks know about their personal Add an article
the public
life
what
is going on but all personal Correct word choice
and what
matters
are not revealed by means of communication. Hence
, in my opinion about
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apply
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apply
this
, media
should be modulated to reveal someone
's personal life
facts.Submitted by reanudeepan on
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Task Achievement
Ensure you fully address all parts of the task, providing a balanced discussion of both views and a clear opinion. Your essay needs to portray your views with more clarity and provide a distinct conclusion reflecting your perspective.
Coherence & Cohesion
Work on the logical progression of ideas throughout the essay. Your paragraphs should follow a clear sequence with appropriate connecting words to ensure the arguments are clearly presented and there is a natural flow of ideas.