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The chart below shows the changes in three different areas of crime in Manchester city centre from 2003-2012.

The chart below shows the changes in three different areas of crime in Manchester city centre from 2003-2012.
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The line graph illustrates the changes in three types of crimes
such
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 as
burglary
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, car theft and
robbery
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 in Manchester city
center
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centre
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 from 2003 to 2012. Overview, it is noticeable that
burglary
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 was the most common
crime
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 in the initial year,
whereas
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 the bottommost was
robbery
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 in
moderate
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 period. Over the period,
burglary
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 experienced a significant decrease, car theft showed
steady
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a steady
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 increase and
robbery
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remain
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 more or less the same. The rate of
burglary
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 crimes, which accounted for roughly 3,500 in 2003, dropped slightly to 1,000 in 2008 and rose to 1,500 in the ultimate year. The topmost
crime
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 since 2007 was car theft, which approximately amounted to 2,500 in 2003, went down gradually to 2,000 in 2006 and
then
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had risen
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 to 3,000 in 2012. But
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nevertheless
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 there was little decrease in 2008 and 2011. The
crime
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 that experienced fluctuating stability was
robbery
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. It constituted 500 in 2003. In spite of the increase to 1,000 in 2005, the
crime
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 maintained the same rate in each period, namely the start, moderate and end, except for slight changes between the years.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words burglary, robbery, crime with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "changes" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "moderate" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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