Some people think that the best way to ensure road safety is to increase the minimum legal age for driving cars or riding motorcycles. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
The general introduction
Talk about 1 and 2 graphs.
Describe what we were provided.
The
first
and second
figures show information about the number of men and women attending various evening courses
at an adult education Centre in the year 2009.The first
figure
shows which evening courses
were more popular. The second
figure
illustrates information about which aged
visited these Replace the word
ages
courses
.
The first
figure
shows information about which evening courses
were more popular in education
Centre. Correct article usage
the education
On the
graph has drama, painting , sculpture and Change preposition
The
language
courses
.The most popular course
is language
Correct article usage
the language
course
, on this
courses
Fix the agreement mistake
course
went
40 Verb problem
there were
woman
and 20 Change to a plural noun
women
man
.The painting Change to a plural noun
men
course
had smaller
number of Add an article
a smaller
people
by
25 than the Change preposition
apply
language
course
(60 adults).The worst club was sculpture . There went the least the
number of Correct article usage
apply
people
. Interestingly, this
evening club visited
Add a missing verb
was visited
in
2 more Change preposition
by
man
than Change to a plural noun
men
Add an article
a woman
the woman
woman
(5 Fix the agreement mistake
women
woman
). The
The Change to a plural noun
women
second
figure
demonstrates aged
visited these Correct article usage
the aged
courses
. The most popular age is under 20 (42%).Adults who 40
- 49 years almost similarAdd a missing verb
are 40
Change preposition
to
people
who 30
-39 and 20 - 29 years Add a missing verb
are 30
(11
% , 16%)The smallest age in the evening Correct word choice
old (11
course
is aged
under 20 only 5 percent visited Verb problem
apply
this
Correct determiner usage
these
courses
in 2009.
In conclusion ,the two diagrams above show how many people
attended evening courses
in 2009.The first
figure
illustrates woman
visited more than Fix the agreement mistake
women
man
.The Fix the agreement mistake
men
second
figure
shows the most popular age were
50 or more .Interestingly , old Correct subject-verb agreement
was
woman
prefer Fix the agreement mistake
women
spend
in evening clubs and teenagers Add the particle
to spend
did
not like evening Wrong verb form
do
courses
. Describing two figures , and we can say sculpture like old
Add an article
an old
the old
man
and the favorites
Change the spelling
favourites
woman
club is language
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