some children spend hours every day on their smartphones why is this the case do you think this is a positive or a negative development

Nowadays, it is commonly seen that kids use their smartphones for hours

everyday

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While

other

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others

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believe that there are some advantages, I believe that

this

is a negative development. On one hand, smartphones make children’s

life

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easier because they can access information whenever and wherever through

over the top

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applications

such

as Instagram or

Tiktok

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.

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benefit

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them to connect and communicate with other people, sharing their interest anytime and anywhere.

In addition

,children

also

can play various online games to broaden their creativity. Those

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benefits encourage children to

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on their smartphones for hours. On

other

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hand, smartphone usage causes a lack of activity that leads to some serious health problems.

For instance

, sitting too much

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some diseases

such

as obesity.

Furthermore

, consuming

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on social media could generate serious mental health. Children tend to compare their

life

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to their friends or influencers on social media, which has become one of the biggest modern

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To conclude

,

although

this

issue has both positive and negative impacts on kids, from my point of view, the positive impacts still could not outweigh the negative impacts. Parents should take

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action to reduce the amount of hours spent

for

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using

smartphone

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smartphones

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so that the

drawback

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could be

declined

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