Some people think most crime is the result of circumstances. Otthers believes that most crime is cused by people who are bad by nature. Discuss both view and give your own opinion.
Some
people
say Use synonyms
series
of conditions is the reason behind most crime. others Correct article usage
a series
thinks
Change the verb form
think
bad
Correct article usage
the bad
nature
of some Use synonyms
people
is the result of most crimes. In Use synonyms
this
essay, I will discuss the Linking Words
caused
behind Replace the word
causes
of
the majority of the crimes and I will provide my point of view.
One of the major Change preposition
apply
cause
of crime is parenting. Fix the agreement mistake
causes
This
is because parenting will build and shape the personality of a person, Linking Words
this
is not only Linking Words
Use synonyms
Correct article usage
the parents
parents
Change noun form
parents'
parent's
responsiblity
Correct your spelling
responsibility
Linking Words
also
Correct word choice
but also
Use synonyms
Correct article usage
the school
school
. Change noun form
school's
Moreover
, Linking Words
Parents
are responsible Use synonyms
to teach
and Change preposition
for teaching
educate
their children at home, but most of the kids Wrong verb form
educating
time
at Use synonyms
school
with their teachers and friends. To illustrate, Use synonyms
in
these days, children Change preposition
apply
not
have Add a missing verb
do not
time
with their Use synonyms
parents
at home, because they are busy Use synonyms
at
their work most of the Change preposition
with
time
, and Use synonyms
this
Linking Words
will lead
their kids to go out and meet with bad Wrong verb form
leads
people
. Use synonyms
For instance
, during Linking Words
my
high Correct pronoun usage
apply
Use synonyms
school
I met and Add a comma
school,
make
a lot of friends, and I Wrong verb form
made
witness
some of my friends Wrong verb form
witnessed
are
changing over Unnecessary verb
apply
the
Correct article usage
apply
time
, at first they Use synonyms
start
smoking Wrong verb form
started
then
they Linking Words
start
Wrong verb form
started
to
drinking alcohol Change preposition
apply
then
Linking Words
Wrong verb form
started
start
avoid coming to Add the particle
start to
school
. Use synonyms
This
is because their Linking Words
parents
did not give Use synonyms
enough
Correct pronoun usage
them enough
time
to spend with them.
Use synonyms
On the other hand
, some think there is bad Linking Words
nature
Use synonyms
on
Change preposition
in
people
. Use synonyms
This
is because when someone Linking Words
have
a Change the verb form
has
criminial
record and some members of his family or if he or she Correct your spelling
criminal
have
the same Change the verb form
has
nationalitiy
Correct your spelling
nationality
nationalities
also
Linking Words
have
, Unnecessary verb
apply
that
Linking Words
is mean
Wrong verb form
means
this
family have a bad Linking Words
nature
. Use synonyms
For Example
, Pablo Linking Words
Oscobar
what of the biggest drug dealer Correct your spelling
Escobar
on
Change preposition
in
the
history, many Correct article usage
apply
people
Use synonyms
thinks
most Change the verb form
think
of
Change preposition
apply
the
Correct article usage
apply
colombian
Change the capitalization
Colombian
people
are drug dealers or Use synonyms
they
have no problem Correct pronoun usage
apply
to smoke
weed or Change the verb form
smoking
have
a drug, Unnecessary verb
apply
Linking Words
this
is not true, because I have a lot of Correct word choice
but this
colombian
Change the capitalization
Colombian
friend
and they don't like it and they are health Change to a plural noun
friends
people
.
In my opinion, I believe nobody porn in Use synonyms
this
world with bad Linking Words
nature
on them, bad Use synonyms
nature
will Use synonyms
acquired
over the years, Change the verb form
be acquired
acquire
because
a series of circumstances Add the preposition
because of
on
the Change preposition
in
person
life.
In conclusion, Change noun form
person's
while
some Linking Words
thinks
criminal Change the verb form
think
people
Use synonyms
gains
their criminality from Change the verb form
gain
as
series Correct your spelling
a
fo
life conditions, others believe it is some Correct your spelling
of
Use synonyms
people
Change noun form
people's
nature
. I believe some Use synonyms
people
Use synonyms
gains
crime from Change the verb form
gain
school
and Use synonyms
neglection
from their Replace the word
neglect
parents
.Use synonyms
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