Some eople believe that the radio is more enjoyable and practical than TV. Do you agree ?
In
this
contemporary era, while
television
has become the primary entertainment medium for many people, some individuals favour radio
. I adopt the latter point of view because TV needs large and special equipments
to operate Change the wording
equipment
types of equipment
pieces of equipment
while
radio
can be used almost anywhere. Moreover
, watching pectoral programs for long periods can deteriorate the sight of a patient.
To embark, radio
does not need special equipments
to operate and it is easily carried compared to Change the wording
equipment
types of equipment
pieces of equipment
television
. To illustrate, for individuals who spend most of their day outside their houses it is extremely difficult to carry television
because it need
particular devices to work which cannot be available in all circumstances; Change the verb form
needs
therefore
, they have been favouring radio
which allows them to listen and keep up-to-date with the latest news while
they are working or driving. This
can be exemplified by a survey conducted by a group of Iraqi civil society activists who claimed that there is an ongoing trend among Iraqi employees towards using radio
as an effective alternative to television
. This
example shows that not only radio
does not require particular devices to work, but also
it is easily carried.
Furthermore
,radio
can activate only one sense which is the sense of hearing that could play an instrumental role in enhancing the attention of a child compared to television
's screens that
could have a detrimental impact on the physical, Correct pronoun usage
which
as well as
, the psychological health.To illuminate, if a child spends hours in front of a TV screen, pectoral programs can distract their attention due to
multiple colours and sounds that appear on a screen at once. As a result
, several psychological illnesses will occur such
as autism or hyperactivity disorders. For instance
, according to
an article published in Time magazine, it has been found that the incidence of autism among young people has increased significantly and about two-thirds of those pediatric patients were spending up to five hours per day in front of screens whilst radio
to some extent incline their levels of attention because it provides them with the opportunity to hear and process sounds slowly. What can be said here is that television
could negatively affect the physical and psychological well-being of individuals.
In conclusion, after
this
essay has reiterated the above-mentioned ideas, I can claim that the disadvantages of television
can outweigh the benefits; henceforth, radio
is a suitable alternative because it can be carried easily and does not have the harmful effect of television
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