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The map below is of the town of Garlsdon. A new supermarket (S) is planned for the town. The map shows two possible sites for the supermarket.

The map below is of the town of Garlsdon. A new supermarket (S) is planned for the town. The map shows two possible sites for the supermarket.
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The map illustrates some probable locations for a new
supermarket
 in
Garlsdon
. Looking at the
mapof
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map of
 the town, it is seen that
industry
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the industry
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 zone takes
the
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up the
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 biggest part of
Garlsdon
.
Town
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The town
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 centre which is one possible
places
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place
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 for the construction of the
supermarket
 is characterized by high population density. Despite
this
 fact
absence
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the absence
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 of
traffic
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a traffic
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 zone makes it more complicated to reach the possible
supermarket
 in case it is erected
in
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apply
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downtown. What is more, another location for the mall is considered. Outside the town of
Garlsdon
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Garlsdon,
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 a countryside zone provides enough territory for
supermarket
 establishment.
That is
 why, it is
plannned
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planned
 to be built in the North-West
in
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apply
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12 km
to
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from
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Hindon
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the Hindon
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 population. The main road runs in
this
 place
what
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which
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 enhances the
accebility
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accessibility
 of
projected
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the projected
a projected
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supermarket
.
It is clear that
 two possible variations of
supermarket
 location have both pros and cons. All in all,
erection
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the erection
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 of
this
 construction may increase
level
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the level
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 of life in
Garlsdon
 which is vital for its population.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Accessibility
  • Congestion
  • Economic benefits
  • Environmental impact
  • Foot traffic
  • Green space
  • Job creation
  • Local property values
  • Parking availability
  • Pollution
  • Proximity
  • Public transportation
  • Sustainability
  • Traffic patterns
  • Residential areas
  • Shopping convenience
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