The three charts below show the value in Australian dollars of Australian trade with three different countries from 2004 to 2009. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information below.

The three charts below show the value in Australian dollars of Australian trade with three different countries from 2004 to 2009.

Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information below.
The three charts below provide
the
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information concerning the
value
in Australian dollars of Australian trade with three different countries from 2004 to 2009. The data can be divided into two groups, namely the number that experienced upward
trend
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trends
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and downtrends. Figures are given in billion dollars.
Overall
it can be clearly seen that
,
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the number of
exports
with China in 2009 is the highest
value
and the number of
imports
with China in 2004 is the lowest
value
over the given charts.
To begin
with the
value
of trade with China, the
exports
and
imports
value
starting
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at about 10-20 in 2004 before moderately
increased
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to 30-35 in 2009 which is the
hightest
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highest
value
over the following 5 years. It is interesting that the
rate
of
exports
and
imports
with Japan starting at the same level which is around 20 in 2009. After that, the
exports
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rate
grew significantly
into
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30 in 2009
whereas
the
imports
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import
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rate
remain
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remained
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at the same level in the same year. Moving on to the trade with
United
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the United
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states
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, the
value
of
exports
and
imports
starting
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started
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at 10 and 20 respectively in 2004.
Then
, the
rate
remained
approxiamtely
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approximately
at the same level in 2009.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 93%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words value, exports, imports, rate with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "remain" was used 2 times.

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