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The three charts below show the value in Australian dollars of Australian trade with three different countries from 2004 to 2009. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information below.

The three charts below show the value in Australian dollars of Australian trade with three different countries from 2004 to 2009. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information below.
The three charts below provide
the
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apply
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information concerning the
value
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 in Australian dollars of Australian trade with three different countries from 2004 to 2009. The data can be divided into two groups, namely the number that experienced upward
trend
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trends
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 and downtrends. Figures are given in billion dollars.
Overall
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 it can be clearly seen that
,
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 the number of
exports
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 with China in 2009 is the highest
value
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 and the number of
imports
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 with China in 2004 is the lowest
value
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 over the given charts.
To begin
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 with the
value
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 of trade with China, the
exports
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 and
imports
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value
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starting
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 at about 10-20 in 2004 before moderately
increased
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increasing
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 to 30-35 in 2009 which is the
hightest
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highest
value
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 over the following 5 years. It is interesting that the
rate
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 of
exports
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 and
imports
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 with Japan starting at the same level which is around 20 in 2009. After that, the
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exports
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export
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rate
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 grew significantly
into
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 30 in 2009
whereas
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 the
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imports
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import
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rate
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remain
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remained
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 at the same level in the same year. Moving on to the trade with
United
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the United
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states
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, the
value
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 of
exports
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 and
imports
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starting
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started
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 at 10 and 20 respectively in 2004.
Then
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, the
rate
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 remained
approxiamtely
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approximately
 at the same level in 2009.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 93%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words value, exports, imports, rate with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remain" was used 2 times.
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