The line graph shows the average number of weekly patients visiting four clinics of a hospital from 2010 to 2016.

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The presented line graph illustrates the comparison of the weekly visits of patients in four different categories of hospitals between 2010 and 2016.

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, in 2010 around 240 patients visited birth control and

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number rose steadily to approximately 280 by 2012 but since

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period the amount of medical examinations dropped to less than 200 in 2014 .

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increasing

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observed again in 2016 , at nearly 240 .

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, visits to the doctor concerning eye issues started lower at 125, slowly expanded over the next two years and culminated at 350 visitors .

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appointments

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dentist

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beginning at 60 slowly grew to under 100 and finishing with sharply expanded to 175 .

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, the number of diabetic visitors checked up

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fell to half in 2012 but recovered in the next two years at 125 and gradually picked up below 150 . Looking from an

overall

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perspective , it is noticeable that the number of patients at the four clinics increased for all types of visits except for birth control which was unchanged .

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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "slowly" was used 2 times.

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
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meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 6.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 6.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

182 words

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