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These days, more and more people tend to procrastinate in tasks. What is the cause? What is the solution?

#people #tasks
Targets are very crucial to
grow
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 and
groom
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; life without goals would be mundane and dull. In
this
 modern era, folks are more
incline
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 to worthless activities,
therefore
, they postpone almost all their urgencies. In the following paragraphs, the main reasons
of
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this
 attitude and some solutions will be discussed. To commence with, in
this
 social media era, residents especially young people tend to delay all their major activities like
preperations
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preparations
preparation
 for their
enterances
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entrance
entrances
 exams like UPSC. Adults find
more
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 fun to go out with their peers or siblings to enjoy
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their surrondings
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surrondings
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surroundings
.
For instance
, my younger sister mostly spend her study time
on
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online chatting,
watching
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and watching
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instagram
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 videos,
whereas
, she should prioritise her study the most.
Moreover
, most
of
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adults, have less
interset
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interest
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 in their fitness, they avoid going
for
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 gym classes
, rather
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and, rather
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 go
for
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window shopping or theater to watch movies.
In addition
 to it, not only adults, citizens who are in their
30's
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 or above always
delays
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health related
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 issues, they tend to gossip around or
busy
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in
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 their work schedule,
while
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when
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 they should put their
hralth
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health
 as a number one
priorty
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priority
. There are some applicable solutions
availble
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available
 to curb
this
habbit
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habit
. The first and foremost is listing the things or chores
according to
the
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priority, if something is extremely important to finish like
heath
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health
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 check-ups or due assignments, should be completed first before
further
 delays.
Secondly
, inculcate a routine to stay active and
heathy
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healthy
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 like
eat
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eating
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 healthy food and
do
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doing
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 some
excercise
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exercise
 on
daily
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a daily
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 basis to remain
energatic
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energetic
 throughout the whole day. To encapsulate,
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a habbit
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habbit
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habit
 is something
that is
 hard to change,
however
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maintain
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 the daily schedule in
such
way
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a way
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, that someone has some extra time to stay free
along with
office
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the office
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 workload. Having
nutrional
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nutritional
 food, and good
excercise
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exercise
 are the tools that can
aud
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aid
 someone to
managae
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manage
 daily tasks without any
further
 delays.
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coherence cohesion
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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