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Every year more and more students choose to study online rather than attend classes on campus. What do you think are the causes of this? What solutions can you suggest?

During the covid-19 many
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online
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normal,
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however
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 there are many
students
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perfer
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prefer
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advanages
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advantages
advantageous
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studnts
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students
,
such
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immedately
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Frst
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learning
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which
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. As
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face to
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campas
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campus
,
students
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 will take more
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 to dress up themselves and the traffic
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 based on the distance
betwwen
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between
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campus
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home
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. To save
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is
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 better, as it did not
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required
require
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internet
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, they will
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their
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in
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online,
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students
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book
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the book
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scool
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school
required
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students
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 should open the
carmer
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camera
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examation
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examination
,
students
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 have a many
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ways
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being
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copy
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Students
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eaily
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easily
to
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get a
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higher
 range even
they
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if they
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 anything.
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students
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 can do
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 when
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 like playing
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moblie
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mobile
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. As many
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students
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open
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teacher
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the teacher
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shpping
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shopping
, gaming or sleeping, it is free in the online
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Therefore
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, there are two
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requied
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required
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students
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Second,
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School
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achool
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school
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, the reasons
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students
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 rather than
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face to
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beacses
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because
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of
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 and not focus on the
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 become lazy, and
the
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acdcemic
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academic
 grade will decrease.
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require
required
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open
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online
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • flexibility
  • convenience
  • cost-effectiveness
  • commuting
  • housing
  • campus amenities
  • technological advancements
  • interactive
  • engaging
  • viable alternative
  • global access
  • esteemed institutions
  • environmental benefits
  • carbon emissions
  • environmental footprint
  • personalized learning experience
  • adaptive learning technologies
  • hands-on learning
  • hybrid models
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