The graph below shows the number of Asian elephants between 1997 and 2004.

The graph below shows the number of Asian elephants between 1997 and 2004.
This
bar chart depicts the number of elephants in 9 different countries in Asia between 1997 and 2004.
Overall
, all the nations underwent distinguished changes.
While
India’s
elephant
population
was the largest, the opposite could be seen in China. India, Myanmar, and Thailand witnessed a decline in the
elephant
population
. The largest
population
was recorded in India in 1997.
This
number was higher than Myanmar with 4000 and tribble Thailand’s quantity. The year 2004 remained the same order as 1997 but Thailand has the highest disparity, at 3000.
On the other hand
,
Malaysia
,
Sri
Lanka
, Vietnam, Lao, Cambodia, and China
elephant
population
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populations
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were small, below 4000. Standing at 3000,
Malaysia
and
Sri
Lanka
shared the same number of elephants,
trible
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triple
China’s
population
, the lowest country. In 2004, all 3 countries,
Malaysia
,
Sri
Lanka
, and China declined.
While
Sri
Lanka
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Lanka's
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population
dropped by 100,
Malaysia
plummeted by 2000 elephants. Strikingly, Indochina witnessed negligible fluctuations.
Although
from 1997 to 2004, Vietnam and Laos
elephant
populations fell, Cambodia’s
population
grew slightly.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words elephant, population, malaysia, sri, lanka with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "decline" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • fluctuated
  • decline
  • increase
  • drop
  • steady decrease
  • recover
  • habitat loss
  • poaching
  • efforts
  • protect
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