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Your next door owns a small dog that barks throughout the day and the night write a letter to your neighbor requesting that something be done about the dog

#door #dog #night #neighbor
Dear Mr and Mrs Alex, I trust
this
 letter finds you in good health.I am your neighbour Mrs nouman and need to write
this
 letter in regard to your
pet
 dog barking. I am a huge
pet
 lover and might be you were not aware but
last
 year, I
also
 had a sweet
pet
 dog but unfortunately!
Due to
 a mortal disease, he died and left us in deep grief. Anyhow, Now I come to the main point for which reason I am writing
this
 letter is your dog who always barks whenever my kids and I go outside.
Moreover
, He impatiently looked from the terrace of your house at every passing person and I became so worried to see his anger and anxiety and strongly believe that he must need some medical help because I am aware of
pet's
Correct article usage
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 behaviour and usually they do not behave like
this
. So,I request you to take him to a competent Vet who could check him properly and find out what's wrong with him and make him calm and start his treatment as soon as possible so he can avoid
further
 complications. I hope you will certainly consider my suggestion and do not ignore his barking and abnormal behaviour. yours faithfully, Mrs noman.
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coherence cohesion
Ensure each paragraph presents a clear main idea and maintains a consistent focus. Avoid introducing multiple topics within a single paragraph.
coherence cohesion
Use varied sentence structures and transitions to improve the flow of your writing. Logical connectors can enhance cohesion between sentences and paragraphs.
task achievement
Address all parts of the task. Make sure your letter requests action regarding the dog barking and provide clear reasons for your request.
task achievement
Maintain a polite and formal tone appropriate for a letter to a neighbour, avoiding overly casual language or colloquialisms.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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