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The table below gives the information about the problems faced by children in two primary schools in 2005 and 2015.

The table below gives the information about the problems faced by children in two primary schools in 2005 and 2015.
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The table chart provides
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data in
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 about the issues that children used to have in
school
 A and
school
 B in 2005 and 2015.
Overall
, the learning problems that happened in
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school
 A overweighed
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school
 B in all seven
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 in the ten-year period. In 2005,
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 A the number of students, who were struggling the most with
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concentration
 in lessons were around 40% and in Following instructions by 42%. The rest
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the
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 difference from the latter two areas by almost 10%. In 2015, the situation in
school
 A got better as
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five out of seven problematic areas were managed. The previously mentioned two
cathegories'
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 number of pupils plummeted to 18% for both.
On the other hand
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worsen
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 among the pupils at
school
 A, as the data increased from 22% to 23% and maintained 28% , respectively. In
school
 B the situation stood
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, as the proportion of pupils for each
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 increased,
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consentration
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concentration
 in lessons, the
persentage
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percentage
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 that area stuck
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 15%. The first thing that hits the glance is the
doubleing
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 of the number of students who had problems in
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 area from 5% to 10% and in Following instructions from 6% to 12%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words school with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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