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Modern technology is transforming the way we work and is of benefit to all of society. Do you think advantages outweight disadvantages?

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These days , segment of community ponders thar present
technologies
 have transformed methods of our work ,
also
 they are beneficial to our society .  From my perspective , benefits are superior than drawbacks because of aspects : economic benefit , valuable overcome global problems .
However
 , they may cause to drowbacks
such
 as : declining human factor . To commence with , up to date
technologies
 may lead to economic growth because , they are a more productive than ordinary humans and more skilled and these abilities may exceed discrepancy between humans and
technologies
 in the some sectors
such
 as in industry or in an agriculture .
Furthermore
 , these
technologies
 do not require salary or wage and it may be reason for  avoiding laborers which need payment for working . Economy of country may earn more profit from them by fabricating robots , computer and other technology advencements .
For instance
 , in 2019 , scientists in the USA created robots which positively impacted to reform of industry . More alarmingly , we can utilize them against global problems and disaster because their IQ level is higher than people and with their analyses , inventions we can decay consequences of global challenges  ,
for instance
 , collabration with them we can pinpoint resolutions for : rampant diseases or decline harmful results of catastrophes . Despite these benefits , these advancements lead downsides
such
 as decrease human factors :  automation and reliance technology can lead to job displacements and the potential loss of human skills  .
For example
 , only  creation of master robots declined number of teachers in European countries   . Unless individuals  can controll them , it may lead to tremendous occurrences , because they are govered by programmes or apps which are created by programmers and no one can promise that these
technologies
 will not be fallen victim to hackers . result of these situations is not predictable . To reiterate , Modern
technologies
 have revolutionized methods of our works and these advancements will be profitable to us with some aspects and they can encroach downsides .
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task achievement
The essay addresses the prompt but it does so somewhat unclearly. The main ideas are presented but not developed fully. More concrete examples and further elaboration on the points mentioned would enhance the essay's completeness.
coherence cohesion
The essay lacks clear logical structure. Ideas need to be presented in a more organized manner, with clearer connections between them. Use transitional phrases to guide the reader from one point to the next for better flow.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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