In the future nobody will buy printed newspapers or books because they will be able to read everything they want online without paying. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement.

With the technological
develepments
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developments
development
we have reached today there is a common view like
people
will no longer buy
books
, newspapers or other
paper based
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articles because they will have a chance to read them on
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the internet
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internet
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wihout
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without
any payment. Even though they have good reasons to believe that, I partially disagree with them. Nowadays,
people
using
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various social media platforms to meet their various needs.
People
started to learn daily news directly from their social media accounts so they don’t buy newspapers or watch the news on TV.
Moreover
, they started to read their
books
online without going
any
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bookshop to
purchase
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purchase them
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. Because of the internet’s
accesibility
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accessibility
today, many
people
choose
this
method which is more appealing and easy.
Thus
, the
numbers
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of these
people
started to increase day to day.
However
,
although
the
people
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who
chose
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online methods have
grew
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, there are still
people
who
is
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are
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looking for
paper based
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books
or newspapers including me. They see
this
as a passion and love to touch or
the
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smell its papers.
For instance
, I don’t like the read
books
online because the phone
casting
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a lot of blue light which bothers me a lot.
Also
, I like to visit bookshops, touch the
books
and read them a little bit before purchasing.
Additionally
, I have
special
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library which includes the
books
that I collected since 2006.
Moreover
, the belief that online content is entirely free is a misconception.
While
it may be true that many websites offer free limited content, quality journalism and writing still come at a cost. Journalists and writers require fair compensation for their work, and without revenue from paid subscriptions, the quality of online content may suffer. In conclusion,
while
some
people
choose
read
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any article online,
the
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others see reading from paper as a hobby. In my opinion,
the
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internet based
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reading
was
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always
accesible
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accessible
for emergencies but what matters
for
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to
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me is to touch and understand the
soul’s
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souls
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of these papers.
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  • convenience
  • cost-effective
  • cultural value
  • sentimental value
  • reliability
  • distracting
  • access to
  • digital devices
  • internet
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